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   %li Work on their own projects with the guidance and mentorship of our faculty
 
 %p The programme is designed to fit around a job, particularly if remote or flexible. Participants should expect to spend at least sixteen hours a week on a mix of group discussion, prototyping, reading, attending events, and connecting and collaborating with other participants, fellows, members, organisers, and the growing communities working on political technology.
-%p This is not a conventional taught course in which participants attend lectures and pass by showing up. Rather, it is an immersive year spent entering an existing community and learning the field of political technology through its institutions, events, tools, norms, and accumulated body of work. Fellowship candidates are expected not only to learn, but to engage seriously with the life of the college and the wider field, building their public profile while using the programme as a space in which they can test their political technology prototypes.
-%p Activities are re-designed each year to reflect the dynamic nature of the field and the needs of the particular cohort, but broadly the first half of the year (October - March) is focused on group exercises and getting an overview of the existing landscape, and the second half (April - August) on developing your capstone project, a meaningful original contribution to the field of political technology. Upon successful completion of the programme, you will be invited to join the #{link_to "Newspeak House fellowship", "/fellowship"}, the start of a lifelong relationship with the institution and its networks.
+%p This is not a conventional taught course in which participants attend lectures and pass by showing up. Rather, it is an immersive year spent entering an existing community and learning the field of political technology through its institutions, events, tools, norms, and accumulated body of work. Fellowship candidates are expected not only to learn, but to engage seriously with the life of the college and the wider field, building their public profile and using the programme as a space in which they can explore and experiment with political technology.
+%p Specific activities are re-designed each year to reflect the dynamic nature of the field and the needs of the particular cohort, but broadly the first half of the year (October - March) is focused on group exercises and getting an understanding of the existing landscape, and the second half (April - August) on developing your capstone project, a meaningful original contribution to the field of political technology. Upon successful completion of the programme, you will be invited to join the #{link_to "Newspeak House fellowship", "/fellowship"}, the start of a lifelong relationship with the institution and its networks.
 
 
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